Writing Sample River Crossing!!!!

MY WRITING

Here is my writing sample about river crossing that we did as a activity for Camp Rangi Woods. 
What have I done well?
done lots of editing and made it more interesting. As well inproved in my writing.
What would I do differently next time?
Change words from boring words to more satisfying words.
What have I learnt?
That you can change boring words into interesting words I will use that in all my writing next time.
So now I know what to do next time. I've learnt alot know. Wait until my new story is out just wait.